You did such a good job on your edits, @dwixer. Really smashing.  I have added a few more suggestions, if you care to look at them.  A little fine tuning.  You will see them inserted throughout the piece. Of course, this is your piece and you make up your mind about how you want the story to be.  

Here goes:


Arthur opened his eyes drowsily, his body covered with dust. Far from him, his horse was lying lifelessly. The dust storm must have hit it so hard, he thought. Just when he struggled to get on his feet he felt a sharp pain on his shin and saw bloodstain on his trousers. He shrieked as he strove to stand only to realize his ankle was broken.

Arthur was an Arabian trader, 6 ft tall, fair in complexion, and had long curly hair. He was traveling through the Sahara desert when he encountered a dust storm; all efforts to escape this disaster failed.
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"The compass had given (must have given me, or gave me) me a wrong reading," he said (,) saddling the horse faster, but he was already in the middle of the desert. It was three days already, no trace of his bag lunch except his horse which had no sign of life lying on the other side of the desert.

He was all alone lying helplessly as he crawled on the sandy ground dragging his broken leg.
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"I thirst," he mumbled(,) searching for an Oasis. His throat was dried; he battled soothing his throat to remain wet as his teeth rattled. The injury on his ankle was still bleeding(,) causing him more discomfort as he crawled on the hot sand; (. He)he tore a piece from the overcoat he wore and tied his ankles(ankle) to prevent the blood from gushing. He crawled a little farther and couldn't move anymore, (. He)he lay hopelessly(,) praying a passerby will see him and render help to him. As he lay struggling for his last breath(, when) he felt a soft breath on the back of his neck,(.Beside) beside where he lay was an Oasis guarded by a creature. He turned to see a fantastic-looking creature with blue eyes, a pointed nose, and long fingers.

"Save me," Arthur cried,(.His) his hoarse voice could hardly be heard.
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The creature said nothing as it stared persistently on the pendant (Arthur)he was wearing.
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"Save me please," Arthur repeated.
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"I will if you give me this pendant or a tortoiseshell for a price," the creature demanded.
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Arthur believed it was this pendant that always brought good luck to him as a trader, but he had no tortoiseshell to give in exchange, and giving out this pendant (meant)means his business may not prosper.
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" Make another wish,(.) I will give you plenty of gold in exchange for your generosity," he pleaded.
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" No, I don't need your money(. Delete but.  Start the next sentence with Either) but either this pendant or the shell(,)" the creature insisted.
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It's Wednesday, a busy day for traders,(. new sentence with A) a trader may pass soon, he thought, but his breath was gradually going out from him,(. He) he may not survive that long. It was this pendant that will help him recover from this loss in a short time.

The creature started to walk away after Arthur's indecision for some time.
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"Take," he stretched out the pendant to the creature,(.) "Help me now".
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The creature looked at the pendant with admiration as it fondles (fondled) it into a purse.
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 The creature released the water to flow to (Arthur. Delete him) him, (Start new sentence with Afteward)afterward he soothes his wound.
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"Besides (Beside) that tree is a horse,(. Start sentence with You) you can saddle (it and ride it back home) on it back home," the creature said.   Arthur became troubled,(. Start the new sentence with It) it wasn't just a pendant that brought him luck (,) but his mum's gift to him before she died. He walked away(,) hoping someday he will get a tortoiseshell to come exchange for the pendant.
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I hope you can follow my suggestions.  Ask questions, if you like.  I wish you good luck and congratulate you on this really improved edit of your story.

Good luck!

Hello @dwixer:

This is the first story on which I am commenting *after* the contest results came in.  I want to let you know that it is gratifying to see how your story improved and how you chose to benefit from the many different suggestions you received. It takes modesty and an open mind to accept suggestions.  Of course, you have to know what suits you and what doesn't. But, the first step is listening.  You do that.

Congratulations on your growth as a writer. I have observed that growth not only in this contest, but in your blogging generally on Hive.

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Thank you for submitting your final draft to the contest, @dwixer!

Hello @dwixer. A nice edit of your story. @agmoore did an excellent job assisting in the use of correct grammatical.

Just an additional find if you agree:

>encountered a dust [storm; all] **storm. All**

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I wanted to make a suggestion. Make sure you read through your post and follow the line of action your character takes.

>It was three days already, no trace of his bag lunch [except his horse which had no sign of life lying on the other side of the desert]. **except should be referring back to *lunch bag*.** Unless there's an exception to "no trace of his lunch", you may want to end the sentence after lunch bag. Then begin a new one  dealing with his horse:
>>His horse, which had no sign of life, was lying...

Also, in the middle of your story you state:
>The injury on his ankle was still bleeding, causing him more discomfort as he crawled on the hot sand. 
At the end of your story, you state:
>He walked away, hoping 
Question. If Arthur's ankle was still bleeding badly, then how could he just walk away.  **Shouldn't he use the horse he was given to *ride away**.

Hope this helps.