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Flossing - Original Poem by raj808

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Flossing - Original Poem
![drawn-water-droplets-eye-teardrop-9.jpg](https://res.cloudinary.com/hpiynhbhq/image/upload/v1515517972/zrwzsfn0t8rwm8yibbpv.jpg)<br><center>I floss my tears, caught in my teeth
like a body swinging in the breeze.
Pouring from my ducts, a molten flux,
a penitent sigh, I cry. I floss my tears.</center>

<center>Years pass, I floss tears from my eyes.
They still come, in the shuddering hum,
an internal earthquake, a guitar strum 
fading, like water draining in its wake.</center>

<center>I floss my tears, the well runs out of water.
Find quietness, practice forced laughter. 
No matter, my strategies, Iā€™m squeezed
in those cacophonous chord smashes,</center>

<center>on the flood walls of my inner shore.
I floss no more and the flood gates open.</center>

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![divider-1024.png](https://steemitimages.com/DQmb9i2KiKpKHoj63jj482Z2HpRPSbx1UyAPXrRGYxXzhEj/divider-1024.png)<center>This post is in response to mariannewest freewrite writers prompt which can be found [here](https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-81-5-minute-freewrite-prompt-i-floss-my-tears). The prompt was the sentence *I floss my tears*. The picture is from moziru.com [free to use](http://moziru.com/explore/Blue%20Eyes%20clipart%20eye%20tear/#gal_post_224_drawn-water-droplets-eye-teardrop-9.jpg), please follow link for verification. In this freewrite I felt the need to do some editing to the poem after the 5 min time was up. It just wasn't right. However, I wrote no new verses but did correct grammar and got some suggestions for word/imagery changes. I hope this is ok, just this once.</center><br><center>A big thanks to both [The Writers' Block](https://steemit.com/@thewritersblock) +
 [Isle of Writes](https://steemit.com/@isleofwrite) groups for helping me work-shop this poem.
 Particularly, I would like to thank sunravelme and geke.</center>![divider-1024.png](https://steemitimages.com/DQmb9i2KiKpKHoj63jj482Z2HpRPSbx1UyAPXrRGYxXzhEj/divider-1024.png)
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@buttcoins · 
bloody tears and gums,  a bleeding, grinning... make -up smeared mess.

nice one 808
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@raj808 · 
Ha ha. Yes, it's a gin addled tyranny on a Saturday night out. Crying and getting in to fights over the last bottle of Lambrini wine ;-) Always a hoot and a hollar when you stop by @buttcoins
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@cain1914 · 
Beautiful words that converse with my soul, and come to an agreement just not to cry. Thank you for sharing.
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@miniature-tiger · 
Nice work raj808! 

Here's the link to freewrite 82:
https://steemit.com/freewrite/@mariannewest/day-82-5-minute-freewrite-prompt-stetson
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@raj808 · 
Thanks for stopping by @miniature-tiger :)
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@originalworks ·
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@spellmaker · 
Inspiring! Thanks for sharing with us!
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*Let the gate of knowledge always be open! 
Together we're strong! We cannot be broken!*
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@raj808 · 
Many thanks for your comment and vistit @spellmaker. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and it inspired you :-)
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