大约是在2010年春节的时候,我买过一套书《大秦帝国》。没错,就是那部经典的同名电视剧系列《大秦帝国》。自然,我跟大多数喜欢这本书的读者一样,先是受电视剧《大秦帝国:黑色裂变》的影响,而后才购买的这套书。 这套书现在还在我家书架上,一共11本,全套下来,看起来是比较壮观。 我这里只简单谈下我个人看过这套书后的感受,诚然,这套书是个很不错的书,就是觉得整套书的节奏过于拖沓,而内容也过于冗余,包括有些人物对话都过于啰嗦,我认为如果这套书能浓缩成一本书,那一定会异常精彩。 当然,以上只是我个人的感受和想法而已,一家之言。  Image by <a href="https://pixabay.com/users/miezekieze-607096/?utm_source=link-attribution&utm_medium=referral&utm_campaign=image&utm_content=7536762">miezekieze</a> from <a href="https://pixabay.com//?utm_source=link-attribution&utm_medium=referral&utm_campaign=image&utm_content=7536762">Pixabay</a> 前几天有一天,我把自己先前发表过的部分文章拿出来再翻阅了下,以前有些觉得写的还不错的,而这次便觉得较为一般,甚至一些地方我认为完全可以简略或者缩减。 之前我开始写人物对话的时候,总觉得很难把握,后来写过多次后,基本感觉比较应手了,但我认为有些地方还可以再改进,否则读起来就容易让人觉得重复甚至啰嗦,比如我之前的一篇文章节选: >专诸看这把剑长约七寸,宽寸余,虽短小,却闪闪发光寒气逼人,不由脱口称赞, >“果然是把好剑!” ~~又问,~~ >“吴王有何爱好?” >公子光想了下~~回答说~~, >“~~吴王僚~~极喜好美食。” >~~专诸继续问,~~ >“美食中最喜好什么?” >~~公子光回答说,~~ >“~~美食中~~最好吃鱼”。 >~~专诸说,~~ >“我现在要去太湖学烹鱼去了,今后请公子多照顾我的母亲和家人!”  Image by <a href="https://pixabay.com/users/indigobunting-31264531/?utm_source=link-attribution&utm_medium=referral&utm_campaign=image&utm_content=7587415">Lori Dunn</a> from <a href="https://pixabay.com//?utm_source=link-attribution&utm_medium=referral&utm_campaign=image&utm_content=7587415">Pixabay</a> 上文中比较多的“说”、“问”等重复用词,绝大多数地方完全可以去掉, >看这把剑长约七寸,宽寸余,虽短小,却闪闪发光寒气逼人,专诸不由连连点头。 >“王有何爱好?” 专诸这时忽然开口。 >“好美食!” >“美食中最好什么?” >“最好吃鱼!” >“我现在要去太湖学烹鱼去了,今后请公子多照顾我的母亲和家人!” >专诸说罢,便起身告辞了。 虽然去掉了一些词语,但文章内容不仅意思表达丝毫不差,也让读者读起来觉得更加紧凑。 除了上述提到缩减一些不必要的重复词语,另外还有个技巧,就是不需要给文章增加太多解释。 为什么这样说? 换句话来讲,你可以理解为,读者很聪明,你能明白,他们阅读时自然也明白,你不需要在文章中过多地去解释,否则容易让读者读起来感到厌烦,包括过多的心里内容描述、跟主题关系不大的场景描述等。 相信我,这点许多人都在重复犯这个错误,包括我也不例外。
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>“好美食!” “美食中最好什么? 同道中人啊,鱼果然是最好的食物。
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> 读者很聪明,你能明白,他们阅读时自然也明白 嗯同感… 的确如大伟说!😊😊
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我现在写文也是涂涂改改,我在想以前读书时候写作文是怎么写的?居然不需要涂改。。
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👍👍
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海明威的风格就是这样干脆直接,不错!
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👍👍👍好厉害,看了那么多书
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