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一点写作改进感悟 by rivalhw

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· @rivalhw ·
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一点写作改进感悟
大约是在2010年春节的时候,我买过一套书《大秦帝国》。没错,就是那部经典的同名电视剧系列《大秦帝国》。自然,我跟大多数喜欢这本书的读者一样,先是受电视剧《大秦帝国:黑色裂变》的影响,而后才购买的这套书。

  这套书现在还在我家书架上,一共11本,全套下来,看起来是比较壮观。

  我这里只简单谈下我个人看过这套书后的感受,诚然,这套书是个很不错的书,就是觉得整套书的节奏过于拖沓,而内容也过于冗余,包括有些人物对话都过于啰嗦,我认为如果这套书能浓缩成一本书,那一定会异常精彩。

  当然,以上只是我个人的感受和想法而已,一家之言。

![snail-g02a5f6147_1920.jpg](https://images.hive.blog/DQmcC399TeaQkNBJwTEUkRm44rmHUnU5HKE97j1PA16GLnL/snail-g02a5f6147_1920.jpg)
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  前几天有一天,我把自己先前发表过的部分文章拿出来再翻阅了下,以前有些觉得写的还不错的,而这次便觉得较为一般,甚至一些地方我认为完全可以简略或者缩减。

  之前我开始写人物对话的时候,总觉得很难把握,后来写过多次后,基本感觉比较应手了,但我认为有些地方还可以再改进,否则读起来就容易让人觉得重复甚至啰嗦,比如我之前的一篇文章节选:
>专诸看这把剑长约七寸,宽寸余,虽短小,却闪闪发光寒气逼人,不由脱口称赞,
>“果然是把好剑!” ~~又问,~~
>“吴王有何爱好?”
>公子光想了下~~回答说~~,
>“~~吴王僚~~极喜好美食。”
>~~专诸继续问,~~
>“美食中最喜好什么?”
>~~公子光回答说,~~
>“~~美食中~~最好吃鱼”。
>~~专诸说,~~
>“我现在要去太湖学烹鱼去了,今后请公子多照顾我的母亲和家人!”


![elk-g11c0aac17_1920.jpg](https://images.hive.blog/DQmV2t1jQZUAeYQEPEJYvfVuzcZgufWuN7WtLEMJZSUtv3K/elk-g11c0aac17_1920.jpg)
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上文中比较多的“说”、“问”等重复用词,绝大多数地方完全可以去掉,

>看这把剑长约七寸,宽寸余,虽短小,却闪闪发光寒气逼人,专诸不由连连点头。

>“王有何爱好?” 专诸这时忽然开口。

>“好美食!”

>“美食中最好什么?”

>“最好吃鱼!”

>“我现在要去太湖学烹鱼去了,今后请公子多照顾我的母亲和家人!” 

>专诸说罢,便起身告辞了。

虽然去掉了一些词语,但文章内容不仅意思表达丝毫不差,也让读者读起来觉得更加紧凑。

除了上述提到缩减一些不必要的重复词语,另外还有个技巧,就是不需要给文章增加太多解释。

为什么这样说?

换句话来讲,你可以理解为,读者很聪明,你能明白,他们阅读时自然也明白,你不需要在文章中过多地去解释,否则容易让读者读起来感到厌烦,包括过多的心里内容描述、跟主题关系不大的场景描述等。

相信我,这点许多人都在重复犯这个错误,包括我也不例外。
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@aellly ·
>“好美食!”

“美食中最好什么?

同道中人啊,鱼果然是最好的食物。
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@annepink ·
> 读者很聪明,你能明白,他们阅读时自然也明白

嗯同感… 的确如大伟说!😊😊
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@lovelingling ·
我现在写文也是涂涂改改,我在想以前读书时候写作文是怎么写的?居然不需要涂改。。
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@marygong77777 · (edited)
👍👍
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@weisheng167388 ·
海明威的风格就是这样干脆直接,不错!
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@zhangyan-123 ·
👍👍👍好厉害,看了那么多书
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