Check, Please - Fifty Word Challenge by tanglebranch

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fiftywords · @tanglebranch · Oct 10 '18 (edited)

$1.53

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The waitress takes our untouched plates. 

She's uncomfortable. “How about dessert?” 

She's bleak. “We have cheesecake, tiramisu, or pumpkin pie.” 

She's innocent, caught in the crossfire.

My husband squirms. “No, I think we're finished.”

I nod and place my ring on the empty table. “Yes. I think we finally are.”

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Last round I wrote about a marriage beginning, and this time a marriage has come to an end. 

It's not the same marriage, I promise!

Thanks for reading, and stay tuned for emotional roller coaster rides 😉

👍 themothership, thinknzombie, creatr, momogrow, negativer, bex-dk, cizzo, sbi3, stsl, felt.buzz, helpie, crimsonclad, anouk.nox, eonwarped, anikekirsten, kaelci, ablaze, jayna, nobyeni, hebrewhousewife, ngc, xanderslee, tattoodjay, edthecanadian, crescendoofpeace, clayboyn, saffisara, ink-ubator, dbzfan4awhile, musicvoter, bmj, lordbutterfly, discordiant, johnwjr7, atomcollector, lillywilton, alheath, shortcirk, secretecandy, emsteemians, thecyclist, lunaticpandora, elamental, socent, verhp11, berniesanders, roman.musica, markaustin, jeronimorubio, mindtrap, jonmagnusson, avesa, archaimusic, adam-aj, grizzle, randomthoughts, thedelegator, iflagtrash, engagement, nextgencrypto

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@ablaze · Oct 10 '18

$0.05

Wow. You packed so much in here. Really well worked... Didnt see it coming

👍 dustsweeper, tanglebranch

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@tanglebranch · Oct 10 '18

Thank you so much!

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@bex-dk · Oct 11 '18

Nice work! Looking forward to more.

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@creatr · Oct 12 '18

Well written, but I'm a happy ending kinda guy... :O

😄😇😄
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@hebrewhousewife · Oct 10 '18

$0.02

Oofta, I can feel the tension!

👍 tanglebranch

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@tanglebranch · Oct 10 '18

Thanks, glad you liked it :) I feel for that poor waitress, why is it always her shift that gets the drama!

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@jayna · Oct 12 '18

You seem to be obsessed with marriage right now. What's up with that?

But seriously, I enjoyed this story, and I feel for the poor server. She seems to have picked up on the fact that things are not going well between these two, and all she can do is offer sweets in a vain attempt to remove the pall cast upon the restaurant by their failing marriage!

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@negativer · Oct 10 '18

$0.03

I remain unconvinced this is not the second part of a trilogy you started last week.

Will our couple find their way back? Or are they doomed to live lonely lives filled with solitary slices of pie and nosy waitresses?

Stay tuned!

👍 tanglebranch, ablaze

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@tanglebranch · Oct 10 '18

$0.02

No, last week's couple is two blocks away at the all-you-can-eat buffet, and the missus just revealed she's pregnant with twins!  

Meanwhile, several other characters who may or may not have previously had relationships and/or amnesia experience angst-ridden moments of love/fear/heartbreak/grief.

*thank you for watching Generic Soap Opera*

👍 negativer

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@negativer · Oct 10 '18

In any case, this story is a lesson for why a man should never order a hamburger at a fine French restaurant. 

*I would still do it*
*Hopefully my wife can't get the ring off her finger the next time I do it*

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