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Life Shades by marynn

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Life Shades
Gozie, a boy born into abject poverty, lost his dad to the cool hands of death and watched his mother teetering on the brink of joining him. Struggling, he prayed fervently that God would intervene and grant his mom a second chance, but all hope shattered when she gave up to the ghost. 

Taking her to the two hospitals in the community, they were rejected after he couldn't afford the deposit. Watching his mother die in his arms was the most painful thing that had happened to him. Becoming an orphan at the age of  16 never made him lose hope of survival.

He began hawking after school hours just to make ends meet and pay his school dues since it was a public school. Graduating, he decided to further his education, but all efforts failed. He had to go into farming for two years, just so he would be able to gather some money, but it wasn't enough. Then, the government came, making a contract with the community leaders to hand over orphans in exchange for adequate education. That was how Gozie left his father's land for an unknown city. Within weeks, he was adopted, and an agreement was reached.

Mr. and Mrs. Elliot had been childless for years and finally decided to adopt a child who would be the heir to their house. The two were opposite of each other, while Mr. Elliot found Gozie to be his adopted child, his wife hated him and treated him like a maid. 
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Understanding he was all alone, he endured and continued living as if everything was okay. On several occasions, Mr. Elliot suspected Gozie was going through a lot but didn't want to say. Secretly, he bought a flight ticket and flew him to stay with his sister, whose kids were all abroad.

"I'm off to work, babe. I have some foreigners to meet today at the office, and they are already calling. They are on their way."

"Okay, babe. Drive safely. Gozie will bring your food to the office."

Gently, he pecked her on the cheek as he left the bedroom to join Gozie, who was already set. One after the other, he carried his bags to the car, while the husband watched to be sure his wife hadn't made any attempt to step out of the bedroom. Everything went as planned, and Gozie continued his secondary education with Mrs. Linda, the only woman in the big house. Gozie wondered why the house looked empty but couldn't ask Mrs. Linda whose his children relocated to other countries for a business contracts, leaving Mrs. Linda to manage their property while they were away.

"Gozie!!! Gozie, Gozie. I don't know what gives you the mindset you can behave anyhow you wish in this house. Gozie!!" she yelled at the top of her voice, searching for Gozie from one room to the other.

"Wait oo, what is going on? So this silly boy went out without taking permission from me? He has done his worst, and today marks his end in this house." Immediately, she took her phone and called her husband.

"Hello, babe, your 'son' has left the house without informing me about his whereabouts. He won't like me by the time he returns. I just want to get you informed in case you see marks on his skin," she said, then hung up and brought out a belt. After hours of waiting without seeing Gozie, she concluded he had run away.

"He has run away. I thought you would stay, you haven't seen anything. You want to reap where you didn't sow. You failed because I have won," she said, returning to her bedroom with the belt.

Mrs. Linda continued to take care of Gozie. Although he felt cherished, Mrs. Linda couldn't replace the vacuum. Life was going well with them until Gozie got into his second year at the university when Mrs. Linda fell critically ill. Her children returned and flew her outside the country, leaving Gozie to find a way out for himself.

Gozie never expected what happened to Mrs. Linda, but he couldn't help out in any way. He joined his friend Ken in his self-con, struggling to work and attend school at the same time. His three years left as a medical student were hell, but he conquered. 

He graduated with a first class and was given different opportunities. While working in one of the prominent hospitals, he was doing his master's program. After his degree, he decided to visit his hometown with the thought of beginning good work in the village, interested in saving lives. Through him, hospitals were built in the community with well-trained nurses. He worked passionately to save lives to the best of his effort. 

After some years of good work in his town, he returned to the city to visit his foster parents, Mr. and Mrs. Elliot. Getting there, Mr. Elliot was already old but strong, while Mrs. Elliot was aged and suffering from high blood pressure. He stayed and began administering treatment to Mrs. Elliot.

 Seeing how well Gozie treated her in her critical moment, she felt remorseful for how she had treated him in the past and pleaded for mercy, which Gozie didn't count on. Through Mr. Elliot, Gozie was able to connect with Mrs. Linda, who later got better. Although he took all of them as one big family that contributed to his success in life, he never forgot his origin. For everyone to get to other each otger well, a get together was hosted by the family which ended in joyful celebration of reunion.





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@iskawrites · (edited)
I must have missed it; after Gozie's guardian, Mrs. Linda, fell ill and was taken to the hospital away from him, why didn't he contact Mr. Elliot, who brought him there to shield him from his wife? After all, he was adopted by them and they remained his adopted parents. 

By the way, I love that his story changed for the better and he didn't repay Mrs. Elliot back in her own coins. 
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@marynn ·
Thank you for your thoughtful comment @iskawrites. You have raised a valid point about why Gozie didn't contact Mr. Elliot after Mrs. Linda fell ill and was taken away. 

In the story, many factors influenced his decision. Considering the hardships he had faced in the past and his determination to succeed despite all odds, that's my way of portraying a sense of responsibility and Independence.

Also a way to avoid being a burden  to  Mrs Elliot as Mr Elliot could ask him to return home thus altering his sense of Independence and then facing again the ill treatment from Mrs Elliot.  Thank you very much your sharing your view on my story.
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@rinconpoetico7 ·
A story of personal improvement despite all the adversities and problems. The boy was a true warrior to get ahead and succeed in life. This is a very inspiring story. 

Thanks for sharing your story.

Happy week.
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@marynn ·
Thank you so much @rinconpoetico7, for your kind words and for recognizing the theme of  resilience and determination portrayed in the story. I'm glad you found the story inspiring. Wishing you a happy and fulfilling week ahead as well. 
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@theinkwell ·
A tale of perseverance against the odds. Gozie managed to hold on to hope despite the loss of his parents, an abusive adoptive mother, and being abandoned by his adoptive father's extended family. Your story had promise and some solid ideas for development. It was an interesting read. There were, however, a few disconnects in this piece which could have been addressed in an edit: Gozie's adoptive parents were later referred to as his foster parents. Adoption and fostering are two different things and make a big difference when it comes to parental responsibility. You should stick to one or the other. Secondly, the aging of Gozie was a little confusing. He was sixteen when his mother died, and he later graduated (presumably at eighteen) and spent two years farming before being shipped out for adoption. At this point he would have been twenty years old and already an adult. This scenario is unlikely to have played out like this, as adults don't get adopted. Be careful when writing that you go back and reread your stories to ensure that they make sense all the way through. Seemingly small things, like assigning an age to a person, can have huge consequences for how a story is received when things stop making sense. An edit before publishing would also have caught spelling and grammar issues, allowing you to correct them before publication.

Thank you for writing in The Ink Well. 
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@marynn ·
Thank you so much for informing me about the importance of  maintaining consistency in terminology, character development, for a compelling storyline, I will be careful with that in the future. 

>Adoption and fostering are two different things and make a big difference when it comes to parental responsibility

 I will get this fixed right away, I used to assumed the two meant the same thing but I understand the terms better now. Thanks for pointing those out. For my age miscalculation, I will be more careful in the future to put those into consideration for more clarity and uniformity. 
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