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Writing Tip #5: Is "Show Don't Tell" a Writing Rule? by theinkwell

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Writing Tip #5: Is "Show Don't Tell" a Writing Rule?
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Is “Show Don’t Tell” a Writing Rule?

> "Don’t tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass." – Anton Chekhov

I love that quote because it shows the reason for this writing rule, instead of telling us why it’s important. 

Writing is so much more powerful when it’s rich and descriptive. And beauty is in the eye of the beholder. What do I mean by that? Well, if I tell you a child is “lovely,” it’s just a word. What does that really mean? Does she have golden curls? A dimple on each cheek? Does she look up at you with eyes that sparkle like the sea on a bright day?

To show means to provide those details that help us to see Emily for ourselves, and to believe that she is, in fact, a lovely child. We don’t just have to take it on faith because the author of the story said so.

Let’s look at a few more examples.

Tell: “Harry looked angry.” 
Show: “Harry blinked twice, rapidly. A purple vein protruded from his left temple. And when he spoke, his voice had risen by an octave.”

Tell: “The shops were crowded.”
Show: “Shoppers jostled, moving around one another with grunts and ‘excuse me’s’ and the rustling of packages.

Tell: “The bride wore a gorgeous white gown.”
Show: “The bride’s gown was a soft white, the color of doves, with beads delicately sewn along each seam.”

Tell: “It was a beautiful spring day.”
Show: “Angela walked barefoot through the grass, feeling each soft blade. A dandelion had gone to seed, and its silken wishes floated by on warm air currents. She bent to smell the lilies, careful not to disturb a bee gathering pollen.”

Here’s the good news about writing rules: they were made to be broken. Sometimes you simply need to say that the moon was shining. And that’s okay. Writing out every observation in intricate detail can become tedious and weigh down your story. After all, we are here to read about the characters and the action, and see a drama play out.

So use the “show don’t tell” rule to guide your writing as much as possible, without letting it derail you from writing the story you were meant to tell.

Happy writing!

@jayna, writer and moderator at The Ink Well.


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@balikis95 ·
Thank you for this. It was helpful. I will improve more.
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@jayna ·
Thank you, @c-squared!
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@livinguktaiwan ·
I love how you use examples to illustrate the differences, it makes it so much easier to digest. As to whether I can reproduce something even remotely on par is another matter😅

Thanks. 
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@jayna ·
Thanks for checking out the tips, @livinguktaiwan. Well, as you said it's just to illustrate that there is another way besides writing a summary. There are usually more descriptive words to describe something than "beautiful" or "scary." I can almost guarantee that when you start practicing it, you'll actually find it fun!
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@mrenglish ·
This is so rich. To show is better, it describes the scene or acts very passionately that the ready deduce what action is displayed through reading. 
Thanks so much for referring me here, @theinkwell. 
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@popurri ·
Excelente manera de explicar como mostrar lo que queremos expresar con la escritura. Muchas gracias me va a servir de mucha ayuda para mi proxima historia. Saludos
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@rayt2 ·
Helpful, I am certainly going to use all these tips in my next post. Seems like it will help me grow as a fiction writer. Thank you @jayna & @theinkwell 
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@safari-bangz ·
Wow, this is one writing tip I have come across today. Show don't tell .. Interesting, sometimes I wonder why some authors spend so much time spelling out in details about the character and his environment, now I understand why. Show don't tell 
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@samiwrites ·
This is an excellent piece.. it emphasizes "beautiful description" other than just mentioning a thing and this has to be done only when necessary. Thank you 
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@sunnyag ·
Thanks for the suggestions, so in the future, my lady is going to wear a blue laced gown and my daughter of course is not only lovely but has dimples on her cheeks, golden-brown hair and dark blue eyes! But the only problem is she is too naught!
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@wems ·
The" show don't tell " is one thing I have been trying to master when I tell stories.

Haven't got a hang of it yet. At least I know it's missing, that's a start.😁
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@jayna ·
It's really not easy. In fact, it's just far easier to summarize a scene than to put it in living color. But here's a trick for you, @wems. When you write a scene, add something that is purely about describing the scene, not moving the plot forward. For example, are the characters indoors or outdoors? If indoors, you could add mention of the smell of coffee, or the wet dog smell emanating from the dog's bed in the corner of the living room. If outside, what is the quality of light? These sensory touches can put us in the scene and make us feel more involved right away.
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@wems ·
Ooh thank you for your replies!

I have never thought about it this way; adding at least one thing about describing the scene, I guess this would help me get more comfortable.

I will definitely put this trick to use. I have always wanted to write a movie script, my ideas are all written down. But, I am still not comfortable with my writings, like they aren't good enough, so I stay away from scripts.

Something tells me I am about to begin a journey of being more comfortable with my writing. Thanks for the suggestion. It means a lot @jayna❤
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